A story I've been working on

[pitchyploo]

MDFF is a Femdom Forum.

Violate that again and I'll ban you.

[groundview]

First off this sounds almost word for word from "Bcarpit" wonderful story
Damsel in Distress. You change heels for sneakers and a big no-no here, her for Him!

Plagiarism is not looked too kindly here!

[groundview]

Damsel in Distress


It was a typical late spring day in the midwest.

Morning sunshine followed by a sudden downpour only to give way to clear skies. Being an electrician, bill had spent his share of time out in all kinds of weather.

Today was no exception as he had gotten soaked working on some lights in the parking lot of a suburban shopping mall. The workday was done and he was headed to his truck when he was struck by an absolute vision approaching him from the mall.

Beautiful shoulder length blonde hair, about five foot four made taller by the 4 inch heels on the white pumps she wore. She was a goddess in a white floral print dress that showed of her figure and fell just above the knees of her gorgeous legs.

Bill had always had a thing for nice legs and high heels. He watched from the corner of his eye as she walked along, enjoying the sound of her heels on the asphalt. For as long as he could remember bill had fantasies about being walked on by a goddess like her.

Suddenly she stopped and remarked "oh no!" with great distress. He couldn't help but inquire as to what was wrong. Startled, she looked at him and replied "its my van I don't know how I’m going to it?" she nodded towards a minivan parked all alone in the middle of a large puddle." it was dry when I parked there this morning but look at it now. I guess I’ll just have to walk in the water. It'll just ruin my brand new shoes." bill thought this is to good to be true but what the heck so he said "not necessarily, I think I can help." "would you? I'd really appreciate it . Here I’ll give you the keys so you can get it out for me." she offered.

"it's the least a gentleman would do, " he replied "but I don't think I’d better get in it since I’m quite wet and dirty and I’d make a mess of your seat. But I have an idea come on." he motioned her over to the edge of the puddle. As he got down on his hands and knees she giggled and asked "what are you doing?" "I’m going to lay down in the puddle so you can walk on me to get to the van. I'm all wet anyway." "you want me to walk on you , won't that hurt?" she asked with concern. "not at all" he answered as he stretched out in the muddy water. "I better take my shoes off" she said. "no, don't bother , you'll just ruin your stockings" "but I’m afraid my high heels will hurt you" she answered. "I don't think so come on don't worry" "ok if you say so" she said as she stepped on his calf and carefully walked up his legs.

Bills heart was pounding with excitement. "this is really nice of you" she said as she trod across his buttocks and onto his back, her heels sinking in with every step. She stopped between his shoulder blades to search through her purse for her keys. "oh now where are those darn keys......here we go .

I can't believe this doesn't hurt" she smiled down at him. "not a problem" bill replied struggling to keep his face out of the 4 inch deep puddle. "oops" she paused as she looked at the van. "

I think we have a problem" "what's wrong?" bill questioned. "it's a little too far to reach from here," she thought a moment then smiled down at bill,

"I know, here put your head down ." he was alarmed at what she might be thinking as she gently forced his head down into the puddle with the toe of her shoe. "this will only take a second" she said as she proceeded to step onto the side of his head with her left foot, her heel digging into the skin just below his ear. Bills face was half underwater so he couldn't breathe or speak. As he felt her move forward reaching for the van the pain was intense but strangely pleasant.

He could hear her insert the key into the lock. He also felt her right shoe resting lightly on the back of his head. She was standing full weight on one shoe! He could only imagine how beautiful she must look standing on his head as it slowly sank into the mud.

The pebbles and debris cut into the side of his face but he couldn't make a sound. "there I’ve got it unlocked, see that wasn't so bad" she said sweetly as she stepped back onto his body to open the door. Just as bill caught his breath her foot gently pushed his head back down again! "one more second while I get in" she said as she stepped across his head and into the van.

He pulled himself up on his elbows, spitting mud and looked up to see her smiling down at him. "oh my your a mess! I want you to know I really appreciate this" he smiled and said "believe me it was my pleasure.

By the way my name is bill" "mine's Janice" she replied with a grin. "I hope I’m around next time it rains" he quipped. She laughed and said "so do I" then closed the door an drove away leaving him lying there in the muck. Bill got up and headed for his truck cold and wet on the out side, but awfully warm on the inside.

Bcarpit

[vertago]

liked it the first time it was written by "bcarpet" . You really shouldn't try to take credit for someone else's work! Especially when all you did was sicken it!!!

[hhhmmm]

Here's a story that i wrote, hope you guys like:

It was a typical late spring day in the midwest. Morning sunshine followed by a sudden downpour only to give way to clear skies. Being an electrician, bill had spent his share of time out in all kinds of weather. Today was no exception as he had gotten soaked working on some lights in the parking lot of a suburban shopping mall. The workday was done and he was headed to his truck when he was struck by an absolute vision approaching him from the mall. Beautiful chin length blonde hair, about five foot four made taller by the 1 inch heels on the white sneakers he wore. He was a god in a white floral print shorts that showed of his figure and fell just above the knees of his gorgeous legs. Bill had always had a thing for nice legs and sneakers. He watched from the corner of his eye as he walked along, enjoying the sound of his sneakers on the asphalt. For as long as he could remember bill had fantasies about being walked on by a god like him. Suddenly he stopped and remarked "oh no!" with great distress. He couldn't help but inquire as to what was wrong. Startled, he looked at him and replied "its my van i don't know how i'm going to it?" he nodded towards a minivan parked all alone in the middle of a large puddle." it was dry when i parked there this morning but look at it now. I guess i'll just have to walk in the water. It'll just ruin my brand new shoes." bill thought this is to good to be true but what the heck so he said "not necessarily, i think i can help." "would you? I'd really appreciate it . Here i'll give you the keys so you can get it out for me." he offered. "it's the least a friend would do, " he replied "but i don't think i'd better get in it since i'm quite wet and dirty and i'd make a mess of your seat. But i have an idea come on." he motioned him over to the edge of the puddle. As he got down on his hands and knees he giggled and asked "what are you doing?" "i'm going to lay down in the puddle so you can walk on me to get to the van. I'm all wet anyway." "you want me to walk on you , won't that hurt?" he asked with concern. "not at all" he answered as he stretched out in the muddy water. "i better take my shoes off" he said. "no, don't bother , you'll just ruin your socks" "but i'm afraid my sneakers will hurt you" he answered. "i don't think so come on don't worry" "ok if you say so" he said as he stepped on his calf and carefully walked up his legs. Bills heart was pounding with excitement. "this is really nice of you" he said as he trod across his buttocks and onto his back, his sneakers sinking in with every step. He stopped between his shoulder blades to search through his pocket for his keys. "oh now where are those darn keys......here we go . I can't believe this doesn't hurt" he smiled down at him. "not a problem" bill replied struggling to keep his face out of the 4 inch deep puddle. "oops" he paused as he looked at the van. " i think we have a problem" "what's wrong?" bill questioned. "it's a little too far to reach from here," he thought a moment then smiled down at bill, "i know, here put your head down ." he was alarmed at what he might be thinking as he gently forced his head down into the puddle with the toe of his shoe. "this will only take a second" he said as he proceeded to step onto the side of his head with his left foot, his heel digging into the skin just below his ear. Bills face was half underwater so he couldn't breathe or speak. As he felt him move forward reaching for the van the pain was intense but strangely pleasant. He could hear him insert the key into the lock. He also felt his right shoe resting lightly on the back of his head. He was standing full weight on one shoe! He could only imagine how beautiful he must look standing on his head as it slowly sank into the mud. The pebbles and debris cut into the side of his face but he couldn't make a sound. "there i've got it unlocked, see that wasn't so bad" he said sweetly as he stepped back onto his body to open the door. Just as bill caught his breath his foot gently pushed his head back down again! "one more second while i get in" he said as he stepped across his head and into the van. He pulled himself up on his elbows, spitting mud and looked up to see him smiling down at him. "oh my your a mess! I want you to know i really appreciate this" he smiled and said "believe me it was my pleasure. By the way my name is bill" "mine's jim" he replied with a grin. "i hope i'm around next time it rains" he quipped. He laughed and said "so do i" then closed the door an drove away leaving him lying there in the muck. Bill got up and headed for his truck cold and wet on the out side, but awfully warm on the inside.


OK, I quit after a while. It is supposed to be her, she, etc. The way you wrote the story, it was a male, as in he, etc.

Hope you may be able to learn from this. You must be in a different country using a tranlator program.

Just my thoughts. Just need to learn the difference between the different sexes in English.

hhhmmm

[stivalo]

i prefer the second versione :D

[Moonboy]

i prefer the second versione :D

I like the second version better too.

Firstly, it separates the lines so it is easier to read.

Secondly, the person who started the thread claimed it was a story he wrote

which clearly it was not

Thirdly, in copying it, he lost control of his gender references at the end

anyway. Suddenly he was stepping on his head, which makes him very

flexible as there was only one he in the story.

[butt2facex2]

I must admit i do like the man ...woman thing better but thats just me.

[ichabod]

I have done this a number of times with women and loved it> Read the story fast and didn't realize it was a mistake on genders, but felt for the first time, I would also enjoy doing it with a man -- it is so submissive, gender almost doesn't count!!

[Miss_clinton]

Thank you.. nice one :)