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KoKopeLLi68
02-05-2003, 2:20 PM
Fairly new here... first story post so I hope its good.
Part 1- (Just geting started, not too much action, basically just the story line.)

Me and my girlfriend of almost 2 years now keep no secrets. I know everything about her, and she knows everything about me, except for 1 thing. My fetish for being dominated by girls. Being trampled, facesat, anything, I love it all. But, there was also one thing that she kept from me, a deep and dark secret which she revealed to me in the worst of ways...

Since December of 2000, I've been on a tight schedule which I would like to call "The WHIPPED Schedule". Everyday I come home from long and hard hours at school, and I still don't get a moment of peace or quiet. You see, I'm one of the very lucky people who get to live a block away from their girlfriend. Danielle always is needing to do something. "Take a walk with me", "No, don't get off the phone yet!", "But I don't want to do that" and so on. I love her so much, she's also EXTREMELY attractive, but she's so controlling. She's 5'2 105 lbs, yet I, at 6' 208 lbs, jump at her every command. I can't fully explain it, but I think it has something to do with my fetish for being dominated. Somehow, when she tells me to do something, I always imagine that she is my mistress, commanding obedience from her slave, so i do as she says. But 1 day, everything changed.

It started off normal, long hours at school, come home, go back out for a walk with Danielle. Then, back at her house we listened to the radio. By some unforseen and God given chance of luck, they were talking to a rapper about his foot fetish. At first was uncomfortable, but then I just went with the flow, thinking "She doesn't know anything, just relax".

"Wow, it' kinda weird that some people like feet. I mean it's not weird, it's just kinda stupid." She said. Of course, me and my big, defensive mouth said, "No, it's not stupid. It's just like that phrase to each his own. I mean what's so stupid about it?" It was at that point that I realized what i had said. I turned beet red and the worst feeling of embarrssment came over me. "You like feet don't you? Actually, I know that you do. I can see it i your eyes, so tell me something. Do you like my feet?" She put her shoes on my lap. "Well... I... I...". "Lick my shoes clean. Then maybe you can get what you want." A cruel smile swept over her face, it was such an evil grin. I was terrified, so I did what she told me. I took the sole to my lips and licked. It was disgusting. I tasted dirt, grime, tar, and the cigarrettes that she crushed frequently. I was dying to see the look on her face, but i was scared to look up at her. I wondered what would come next. My mind raced. My heart raced. I felt like I was on extasy. I knew that I couldn't keep my mind trailing from her foot, but it did. "Slave, you aren't thinking about me are you? Well, I think you need punishment. Let's go upstairs. I have to show you something..."



Any feedback would be good, positive or negative. I would like to know whether or not to continue this story... so please respond ASAP.

humble freak
02-05-2003, 4:01 PM
Please continue, it is a good start!

Thanks
hf

oddworld17801
02-05-2003, 6:24 PM
So far it's great! Please keep going!

footobsessor
02-05-2003, 7:46 PM
thumbs up man great story, please go on!!

stevef
02-05-2003, 9:28 PM
yeah a great start at least you write something, i appreciate that:thumbsup: :thumbsup:

Ste Letto
02-06-2003, 1:43 AM
Nice!

Well written, bitchy girl, wimpy guy, build up of excitement.
Sweet. Just go with your imagination and see where it takes you.

KoKopeLLi68
02-06-2003, 2:49 PM
Part 2....


As I followed her up the stairs, she kept kicking me in the face. I knew it was intentional, and I wouldn't dare challenge her over anything. Finally, we got up to her room. I had a look around. It was nice and had a lot of empty space for... well... whatever she wanted. When I turned back, I saw Danielle standing with her back to me, doing something, but i couldn't see what. She turned around. "WHAP!" My face stung, and I felt blood trickle down my lips. As I looked up, I saw what I had been hit with. she had tied one of her strappy high heels to a belt and swung it at me. She did it again. Then again. Then again. I felt so dizzy, but I needed to stay awake. Unfortunately, the next blow was lights out.

I didn't know where I was. It was dark, and my body ached, especially my face. As i touched my nose, I felt dried up blood. Then I remembered my brutal assault from my girlfriend, well, now my mistress, which landed me in this dark room of mystery. I felt around, hoping for a clue. It was at that point that i realized i was laying on shoes. There had to be at least 30 pairs. I couldn't see, but I felt clothing on top of me. Oh no! I was in her closet. I panicked and opened the door.

"Well, there you are. How was your rest? Not too uncomfortable I hope. I was hoping that I didn't kill you before, but I honestly didn't know." She said, laying on her bed. I kept my eyes down. I knew that one slight outburst could cause the worst of punishment, possibly even my own life. I wanted to cry, but i told myself that stregnth, courage, and composure were needed. "OK, well I guess that theres no hiding it anymore. I like my feet worshipped, and you like to worship them. So here's the deal. Choice 1... you leave right now. I don't tell anybody, you don't tell anybody. But I'd never want to see or talk to you again." she said. "But mistress please, I love you. I don't want to do that." I said, eyes still at the floor. "That's what I'm getting to. Choice 2 is that you live the rest of my life at my feet. You will sleep in my closet, and you will live here. I will feed you whenever I feel like it, and you'll do everything that I tell you. You'll cook, clean, do chores, pay my bills, buy me presents, be my driver, and anything else that I ask of you. I will also have friends over a lot, and they will own you too. So what's it going to be? 1 or 2?" she said. My head was pounding. This was a desicion that I was not ready to make, but, I knew that life without her could be empty. I responded, "I want to live at your feet forever." The words came out slurred and unsteady. Either my brain was damaged by her heels or I was extremely nervous. My thoughts were then cut off by the voice that would be with me until i die, "I have your first job, slave. Here."

She got up and walked over to me, standing above me. From behind her back, she pulled out a box. Then, from the box, she took out a pair of knee-socks and tied my hands behind my back. Then, a small stationary light, which she set up in the closet. Then, a knife and a lighter. "Now that you're mine, I'll need to brand you. From this point, you... officially... belong... to... ME!" She put the flame up to the knife and kicked my head. She pulled my shirt up, and cut into my back. I wasn't sure, but I think she was carving a DD into my back, her initials. Then, the last object from the box was a piece of paper, with my task on it. She read, "In my closet there are 34 pairs of shoes. My shoes. Your first job will be bringing me each shoe and doing as I instruct. My instructions will inculde a thorough tounge cleaning, a trample, and cramming it as far down your throat as possible. Now, bring me my black dressy shoes." I crawled to the closet as fast as I could and found a pair of shoes just like the ones that I was brutalized with beforehand. "Now, put them on me... with your mouth." This took quite some time, but eventually I did it. "Now lie on your back." I did as I was told. "This is going to hurt you little bitch, so prepare for the pain....

To Be continued

oddworld17801
02-06-2003, 3:16 PM
This is turning into one HELL of a story!!! Please don't make us wait too long for the next installment. Thanks!

Rif_Raf
02-06-2003, 6:55 PM
Great story keep it coming and thank you

BootWorshipper
02-09-2003, 4:14 PM
First story... I'm trying at least..

Well, your efforts are paying off! I am enjoying this story very much so far. Please continue and as quickly as possible!:)

slofeetlicker
02-12-2003, 4:00 AM
please post more

Aramis
02-12-2003, 3:45 PM
I agree, good job, looking forward to the next installment!

bchickens
02-12-2003, 8:21 PM
awesome story! I hope the wait for next chapter is a short one :)

KoKopeLLi68
02-19-2003, 12:27 PM
Sorry, but I've been and will be busy for a while so the wait may be a little long...

rugman
02-19-2003, 3:32 PM
First story... I'm trying at least..

You were kidding, right? This is awesome!

Ken

Mistress Sara
02-22-2003, 9:27 AM
I compliment you on your writing skills. :thumbsup:

Always Above...
Mistress Sara