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elliott
11-08-2011, 11:59 AM
Hope you all enjoy !! Comments as always very much appreciated !!


The Waitress .

Maybe it was the afternoon drinking or the many many years of frustration and loneliness that spurred him into action that Autumn day but very occasionally he reckoned you were given an opportunity too great to pass up . Sometimes very rarely the planets aligned enough to give you a moment , a split second to make a decision , to throw yourself out there , into the abyss the unknown , leaving past regrets behind and allowing the chance to fall head first into future possibilities . To see whether you had what it took to take the chance that was presenting itself , seize it and then let the cards fall where they may . The idea itself was nothing new to him but acting upon it was a positively alien concept but now he had made his decision nothing was going to stop him . It was with this sudden clarity that he thrust his hand out into the path of the passing waitress .

His realisation was quickly replaced by a jarring bolt of pain that ran all the way through his hand and travelled up his arm as her foot connected perfectly with his outstretched fingers . All the years of dreaming had come to this and his timing and precision were nothing if not spectacular . The pain was unlike any he had ever experienced before , this time it was mixed with a thrill he hadn't known could exist , it heightened his senses , made him feel so alive , he had to bite his lip to avoid crying out with the hurt but mostly with the joy that finally a beautiful young woman had stepped on him even if she had been unaware she was going to do so .

High above him the waitress had seen his hand appear only a fraction of a moment before her foot crunched down upon it , her momentum allowing her no time to stop knowing what was about to happen but having no control over it . She looked down concerned and surprised that she had just roughly walked on another persons hand wondering how it had suddenly arrived before her as she was clearing the tables after the busy lunch rush . She was glad that this had happened in the quieter section of the restaurant where the room cut round in an L shape , she got the idea that standing on the customers possibly wasn't in the job description . She bent down to see a man maybe in his late thirties slowly crawling out from beneath the table , she could see tears almost welling up as he briefly glanced up but then his eyes went back down and remained fixed on her shoes , he began to rub his hand but was obviously in no immediate hurry to get up . If anyone else had been witness they would have sworn that it looked like he was almost relishing his position on the floor basically one step away from literally grovelling at her feet .

“ I'm really sorry , are you all right ? “ she asked him as she slowly helped him up “ That must have really hurt , I'm amazed you didn't cry out “

He continued to gently stroke his hand but once again to anyone else watching this would have come across as if he was trying to trace where her foot had once been and where he wished it still was rather than any real attempt to soothe his pain . He seemed reluctant to meet her eyes as he answered .

“ No , well a little bit , I'm fine though , my own fault for crawling around on the floor really “

“ Okay then , are you sure you're all right though ? I seem to have scraped your hand up a bit , the soles of my shoes are a little rough I'm afraid , don't think they were made with stepping on peoples fingers in mind “ she flashed the man a cute little smile that he didn't catch which seemed to magnify the instant regret she felt from trying to make a joke out of the situation , sure that he would be off to find her boss post haste and report her carelessness , maybe even get her fired , she loved working here it was helping her get through university and today was to be her first chance to lock up after the others left , a position of responsibility she had worked hard to attain . Amazingly to her surprise he did no such thing but actually apologised to her instead .

“ No really my fault totally , I'm sorry to have put you through that “ he continued to look at her feet , his next words surprised even himself , they seemed to just flow out of him , his voice disregarding any idea of better judgement “ Your shoes are very nice by the way , you look lovely in them , if anyone was going to step on my hand by accident I'm glad it was such a beautiful young lady as yourself “

He looked up eventually and met her gaze and saw the relieved yet puzzled look on her face , this really wasn't going as she had expected , she'd anticipated trouble at the very least but now here he was complimenting her shoes and giving her the impression that he was practically happy that she had walked all over his hand . It was sweet really how he was trying to be all cool about it she thought , he came across well enough , a little shy and awkward perhaps and the way he spluttered out his words in a rush as if he was glad to be rid of them was kind of amusing , but he was obviously a nice guy and she felt a little bad that she had expected worse of him . She looked at him , saw his flushed face and behind the obvious pain and embarrassment she thought she caught a look of hope and pleasure that he'd never been able to extend to anyone before . She shrugged the feeling off , her ability to read people had never been a strong point and her relief was stronger than whatever she believed she might have seen in his expression , besides she didn't want to admit to herself her true feelings , the little shiver of excitement she'd felt as she'd felt his hand beneath her foot , fascinated seeing afterwards how her shoe had marked him leaving her footprint on his skin , imagining how much pressure she must have exerted to have done that . She attempted to deny to herself the fact that she'd actually trodden on another human being and part of her had definitely enjoyed it . She was slightly shocked at herself and was hoping that it was just a weird reaction to the stresses and strains of her everyday life . She helped him sit back down then walked away trying to shake those odd feelings as she went over to the bar to get him another drink by way of apology .


To be Continued . . . . .

grizley
11-08-2011, 12:25 PM
Nice start, I think this is going to get verry interesting.

Lone Stranger
11-08-2011, 6:45 PM
I liked the way you described her dual feeling of being truly sorry and scared of what was going to happen next on the one hand and realizing she kind of enjoyed it on the other.

Keep it up! :clap:

Later~

tuvaletkolesi
11-08-2011, 10:18 PM
thanks another great start!!

door_step
11-09-2011, 2:45 AM
Great start!
Look forward to reading more:beer:

Doorstep

trampleme5
11-09-2011, 3:59 AM
Brilliant start thankyou

groundview
11-09-2011, 4:53 AM
Nice start! I like the dialogue and description technique in the story. I have used this way of telling stories in the past and it works well. Just don't get bogged down in too much description. ☺

dirkdiggler
11-09-2011, 6:35 AM
Good start! Hope there will be some shoe-cleaning action, too.

Love your stories!!!!!


thank you

zenonvip78
11-09-2011, 9:44 AM
Great beginning! Can't wait for more!

macrina
11-09-2011, 10:07 AM
Very good start. thx.

chicagofeet
11-09-2011, 1:25 PM
How old is this waitress? There is no way she got to her 20's without encountering a guy under her feet before. Of course, the first time she will think it was an accident. When she finds the same guy under the front counter (under the rubber mat) or in the parking lot under her car, then she'll immediately get that this is no accident. That's when I'd like to hear about her reaction. Every Chicago gal hates the inconvenience of having to deal with a foot/trample guy. They will always scream for the cops, then immediately walk away before anyone arrives. They just don't have the time to bother with it. Now a "special" gal will think about it, talk with the guy and maybe allow him the dignity of remaining under her car as she drives over him and away.

Can't wait to see what new reaction you bring to the women in your story.

LuvsHerHeels
11-09-2011, 5:52 PM
nice start to what I hope will be a great story.
thanks for the contribution to the board.

stivalo
11-12-2011, 12:03 AM
thanks, that's a great start!

elliott
11-12-2011, 1:31 AM
Thank you for all the kind words , so happy many of you enjoyed the start , hope this lives up to expectations !!


Part 2 .

As she walked back to the bar he couldn't help but stare at her , she really was a vision of beauty , totally captivating in every sense , he really couldn't remember the last time he'd seen someone who had captured his imagination in such a way . Sure he'd seen plenty of very attractive young women over the years but never anyone who had inspired him to take the risks he had today . To act in a way he never had before . He had been held back by fear , the possibility of being found out , ridiculed if so , it was one thing having the need to be walked all over swimming around in his head but making it happen , putting it out there in the world was something else entirely . He had always had the nagging idea that if he did it would be as if he had a huge neon sign hanging over his head pointing at him telling everyone his innermost secrets . He had held all of this in his head for so long built it up to such a point that there had also been the dread that maybe if it did ever happen it wouldn't be everything he had hoped for , but at least that was ruled out now , the difficulty being he'd only replaced it with a far bigger concern .

The problem was now he knew very clearly what he wanted , but now the moment had passed , the keenness to move decisively , surely and full of purpose gone , as the overwhelming rush of excitement and possibility began to recede and his adrenalin levels returned to something approaching normal he started to feel drained and defeated , the alcohol now just making him feel tired . When she had stepped on his hand it gave him a glimpse through the doorway into another world , one that he had thought could never exist to him until today , until her , he'd never before had the nerve to try the handle and see what was on the other side .

It was a place he thought that he would be very willing to stay , to make home , somewhere he felt he would truly belong at last casting aside his old life of dullness and empty longing exchanging it for one of satisfaction and a sense of completeness . It hadn't taken that much in the end really to take the plunge but he was at a loss as to how he could experience this wonderful world again even once let alone on a regular basis . The high had been amazing but the low was awful , his mouth was suddenly dry and he felt panicked , he looked around at his surroundings , his life and he felt impossibly trapped by himself . How was he going to cope going back to this mundane existence , the same grey days one after another rolling on forever now that he'd discovered his true purpose , his reason to be .

Even without his crushing shyness it would be impossible to explain to the waitress how he felt , even the thought of talking to her without the Dutch courage he'd consumed made him stressed let alone trying to drop casually into the conversation this bright Sunday afternoon how he thought she was the most lovely woman he'd ever seen and oh by the way I've just come to the realisation that my position in life is at or under your feet would that be okay with you ? He couldn't believe he'd managed to tell her how nice her shoes were and the rest he managed to babble out , the words making him feel silly and unprotected now .

She had been so nice about it all but in reality he had tricked her , been sly and devious , thinking only of his own desires and how he could experience them . He was being impossibly selfish , sure someone like him would never figure in any plans she could ever have of any kind certainly not what he had in mind . She would think him utterly crazy , dismiss him and crush his dreams as surely as she had his hand but this time she would be very aware of what she was doing . She had her own wonderful life ahead of her how could he even entertain the idea that she'd willingly give any of it up to spend time keeping someone so worthless so undeserving underfoot .

He decided to leave before she returned , nothing good could come of this any more he didn't regret anything but could realise he was just getting more fixated and pent up and there was only one obvious outlet and he'd already discounted that as an absolute impossibility . It was possible he would never see her again and just become a funny story she could tell to her friends about how she stood on this man's hand by accident , they would laugh and very soon it would recede to the back of her mind like so many other day to day encounters . The best he could wish for was that when she told her tale she at least had some sympathy for him .

He took what he planned to be his last look at the waitress , he couldn't stop his eyes from returning over and over to her feet and the black ballet pumps she was wearing , watching her every footfall as her feet sank into the plush flooring of the dining area . He wanted to burn these images into his mind so at least he could remember a time when he didn't feel bogged down , to gain a weird kind of confidence from their encounter . Her movements became hypnotic and his imagination ran riot again wondering how it would feel to have her feet connecting with other parts of him not just his hand .

The more he looked at her shoes , the more entranced he became noticing every little detail , the off yellow coloured soles , exactly where they were darkened by grime and debris picked up as she had walked around the restaurant floor and no doubt outside on the dirty streets . As she stopped on her way to pick up empty plates and changed the view he had of her he could spot where the soft material had stretched and creased through wear and the strain of having her feet inside of them , the little beer spills over the toes . Every so often he got a glimpse of her obviously bare feet as her long black trousers moved as she walked . He shook his head , stick to the plan he thought , regain some focus and let it go , leave .

With this he began to gather his things and put on his coat but as he turned around and looked up he saw her returning his drink in hand , her pale skin offset by the gorgeous deep red of her fingernails .

Unbeknownst to him as he been staring at her feet the waitress had been watching him almost as intently as he had her , just with a greater subtlety . She picked up on his agitation , his frustration , she ran his words and demeanour through her own mind and started to feel something was amiss . She'd attempted to shed the feeling of exhilaration she'd felt , but when she looked at him it only returned not fading as she had hoped it would but if anything increasing seemingly not something she could just pass off without further thought . She'd felt this way once before but not had the chance to explore what it could bring to her life , the time and situation simply hadn't allowed it and it had made her feel at odds with who she felt she wanted to be as a person and how you went through life treating others as you yourself would like to be treated so she had shaken it off , taken it at face value for what she thought it was the same as she had attempted to today but some years had passed and she'd come to the conclusion that some people didn't want to be treated as they treated others , they had a different perspective on the whole matter . It was strange to think that two such different people might have something very interesting in common but as she replayed the crunch his hand had made beneath her foot the little tingle of pleasure retuned confirming to her that this could well be the case , she was definitely sowing the seeds of hope much as he had been , but she needed to make sure . She saw him get his coat and quickened her pace before he could make it to the door .

stivalo
11-12-2011, 5:38 AM
I can't wait for the next chapter.
I loved the way he described her shoes and the direction you're leading this story!

grizley
11-12-2011, 11:32 AM
Good continuation, hope the next chapter comes soon.

dirkdiggler
11-12-2011, 11:46 PM
thank you for the new chapter
hope for more

LuvsHerHeels
11-14-2011, 3:28 PM
progressing nicely...please continue...thanks.

hhhmmm
11-15-2011, 6:05 AM
elliot:

This is stacking up to be a great story also!!

But I have to tell ua that you're killing me with not posting anymore about Lucy and Jack!:)

Anyway, keep up the great work. Just love your stories!:)

hhhmmm:)

londonraptor
11-15-2011, 10:35 AM
this is great, as all of your stories, can't wait for the next part, and I, too, can't wait for the continuation of the Lucy and Jack story too! Thanks elliot!

dirkdiggler
02-09-2012, 7:22 AM
Will this story go on, Elliott? Or Lucy and Jack? Pls tell us your plans.

elliott
02-09-2012, 10:54 AM
Will this story go on, Elliott? Or Lucy and Jack? Pls tell us your plans.

Thanks for the interest after what's been quite a while !! To be honest chances of me posting soon if ever on any of my stories are getting pretty slim I'm afraid :tear: Have had a lot of personal hassles of late , which I thought were well on the way to being resolved but events over the past week have shown otherwise . . . I did post an update on the Lucy and Jack thread saying that hopefully I was going to start a new chapter and I have tried a few times to start but I haven't really been feeling it so rather than post something I don't think is worthy of what that story was I think I'd rather just let it be !! I have to admit some of the reasons for writing in the first place were to address and explore feelings that I felt I needed to look at as they didn't/don't always sit easily and writing was a great way to do that . . . At the moment though I'm just needing to concentrate all my time just on the day to day business of living !! Thank you to anyone who left a kind word and/or a comment , they really were all very appreciated !! Apologies to anyone who wanted more . . . :( Really sorry , can't help but think I'm letting some of you down a bit . . .

dirkdiggler
02-10-2012, 1:57 AM
Thx for your words, elliott. I'm sure, you will overcome these hassles.
Sorry my English is not good enough to find the right words. All I want to say is, that your stories gave really a lot to me.
Even Lucy and Jack inspired me to start my own story(but in German because my English is not good enough for a story), so you never let someone down at all!

Please take your time and I hope you will enjoy writing again in the future.
Thank you.

tao2000
04-22-2012, 6:36 AM
Hi Elliott, I just finish dicovering your masterpieces and now I see you will not continue with this great activity.... That's a real pity, but anyway, a big THANKS for the time you spent on it and for the good time you gave us with these nice stories . And lot of luck to you to solve your personal problems. All the best!