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MrCrypt
01-14-2004, 4:43 PM
This is a fantasy I had about my girlfriend. Hope you all like it.

Sunday Beach Party for 2
By MrCrypt



It was a beautiful Sunday morning. I had just ate breakfast and it was off to the shower and then to get dressed. I had nothing to do all day, and my homework was all done. So I decided to get in my car and just drive. Jenny, a friend from school, called me on my cell phone.

"Hey, Matt. I'm bored. Come over and entertain me for a while. Maybe we can go to the beach," she said with very little enthusiasm.

"Sure. I was just thinking about how boring today was going to be. But the beach sounds good to me. I'll be the in 5 minutes," I replied.

I had known Jenny for about 3 years. We were in 10th grade when we met, but didn't really start being friends for a year or so. She had a boyfriend, but they were in an out of fights like boxing. She didn't really like the situation, but she was afraid of being alone and didn't realize how much I wanted to go out with her.
Jenny was about 5'5", she has long and curly jet black hair that goes down her smooth tan back. She's got great breasts that are round, firm, and very ampel. Her stomach is nice and toned and her waist in thin. Her hips were perfectly shaped with an incredible butt that connected just perfectly with her long shapely legs. As much attention as I put on her body, she had an equally incredible face. Her brown eyes were big and dark. You could look into her eyes and see the universe. Her lips were long and soft. And her smile gave you the feeling that you get when you hear great news. She was gorgeous.
I showed up at her house and parked. When I got out, I noticed she was already walking outside to meet me. Of all the years I'd known her, I'd never seen inside her house. Even when I met her parents, they came out to meet me. I've never stepped inside her home before. She greeted me with a big hug, which I loved since her breasts pressed hard into me. And we got in my car and drove off to Santa Monica Peer.
On the ride over we discused her problems with her boyfriend, which always annoyed me since it should be me she's dating, not him. But she told me something that caught my attention more than anything else she ever told me.

"I was with him the other night, and I didn't want to have sex with him," she said in a concerning voice.
I replied, "Why not? What happened?"
"I just didn't feel like it, and he told me that we either have sex or he'll leave. So he left."
"For good?" I replied without missing a beat.
"Yeah. I think he was looking for a reason to leave me though, because I told him Friday that I wanted to try something new..." She said with a very small smerk.
"Oh yeah? What's that?" I jumped in.
"Uh. It's kind of embarrasing."
"When have you ever been able to hold something back from me?" I asked.
"Never, I guess. Promise you wont laugh or judge?" She said nervously.
"I promise not to laugh. I can't promise I wont judge." I said in a humorous tone.
"No really. Promise." She said a little more aggresively.
"Ok. I promise."

She began to tell me something that I could never have imagined she'd ever show interest in. "I wanted to, uh," she started to explane, "sit on his face," she said quickly and almost under her breath.

"You wanted to sit on his face?" I said interested.
"Yeah. Is that bad?" She asked nervously again.
"No. I'd let you sit on my face if I were him." I said. That was the truth. I would. I would be in heaven if this dark haired beauty sat on my face. I don't know if it would be because of the incredibly curvy butt or just the thought of an incredibly gorgeous girl using me, but I did know that would be so great that I had pitched a tent in my pants before I knew it.
She noticed it right away. "I see that," she replied giggling. "Do you want me to sit on your face?"
"Uh. Yeah." I said with assurance.

We got to the beach around 1pm. The beach was nearly empty. Probably because everyone was getting ready for work or school tomorrow. Although, I couldn't imagine way so early. Jenny laid her beach towel in the sand, and brushed off any sand that got on it when she finished. I put my towel next to hers and took off my shirt. But since we had our short facesitting discussion in the car, I couldn't get it out of my mind. Her ass was hypnotic. She was wearing a tight baby-t shirt with a blue bikini top under it and tiny tight blue board shorts that were only a few centimeters below the curve of her round butt.

"If you get sand on my towel, I'll kick your ass." She said. But remembering the conversation we had earlier, I imagined that we'd wrestle for a few seconds, followed by her pinning me (I'd let her of course) and she's sit on my face. So I waited a few minutes and made it look like an accedent when I kicked a little sand on her towel.

"OK! Get over here!" She yelled.
"Sorry. I didn't mean to." I replied with the biggest smile on my face.

She got up and grabbed my shoulders. I put my hands on her arms and she launched her self off the sand onto me, thowing me back onto my back in the sand. There wasn't any wrestling. She had me pinned without breaking a sweat!

"Ok. Here's the deal," she said as she moved up and sat on my chest. "I'm going to sit on your face now and I'm going to count to 30. If you can get me off your face in the 30 seconds, we'll go back to my place and we'll have sex. But if you don't, I'll continue to sit on you until you pass out."

"UNTIL I PASSOUT!?!?" I shouted.
"Yeah. If you can't unseat me after 30 seconds, you can't unseat me at all," Jenny said.
"Jenn, how will you're not killing me," I said worried.
"I won't," she replied. And with that she moved up and sat on my face. Her thighs tightened around my head and my nose and mouth disapeared under her crotch and butt. Tried desperately to unseat her. I pushed her to the side but her thighs pressed together tighter around my head. I pushed her back, but she grapped my hands and kept them up in the air by her side. I couldn't breath and I was starting to feel, even through her board shorts, a small amouth of moister on my nose and on the bridge of my nose between my eyes. She was genuinely turned on. She looked down at me, but I could only see a little of her face over her massive breasts. I heard her say something, but it was slightly muffled since her thighs where locked around my head and pressing against my ears.

"I thought you like facesitting. Why are you trying to get me off you?" She joked. "5 more seconds. 4. 3. 2. 1. Times up! You lose!"

Even then, I didn't expect her to stay seated on my until I pass out. I continued to struggle. But she sat firm. I couldn't get her off me, but I noticed she was 'getting off'. I heard her moan a little. I was having problems concentrating as I noticed things getting a little blurry. I had more problems breathing than before, now that her shorts were really wet. I was getting small pockets of air from under her as I made her shift. But not enough. I started seeing flashes of light. She was touching herself while she sat planted on my face. She got up for just a moment. Not even enough time to get more then a small sip of air and she slammed down on my face HARD. Then darkness...

(Continued Below)

MrCrypt
01-14-2004, 4:45 PM
I openned my eyes. I guess I had completely passed out. My head really hurt bad. I noticed some sand had stuck to my face. Probably from the juices that had spilled out on my face when Jenny was sitting on me. I went to scratch it off, but I couldn't. I couldn't move my hands or my legs. I couldn't move anything but my head. She burried me in the sand. But where was she? I looked as far around me as I could. When I turned my head to the side, I noticed a tan foot inches from my face. It was the inner side of a right foot. I looked up and notice her standing exactly above me! The darkspot on her board shorts was gone. She said "Hello, Matt."

"Hey. What's going on? How come I'm burried?" I asked, trying to act cool about it.
"You're not just burried. Your hands are tied behind your back and your legs are tied too. But you can't feel it because I've packed the sand down so tight," she said as she jumped up and down above me packing the sand down on either side of me.

She then sat down right in front of me, with her legs spred and her crotch just an inch from my face. "Look. I like you, but I think this is a bit much," I said. "We can go back to your place and do this kinky stuff. But it's a little embarresing here on the beach were everyone can see us." I continued.

"No. I like you right here where I can play with you." She said. She scooted forward until she was pressed firm against my face. "You've been passed out for so long my shorts dried up. But while you were passed out, I took my shorts off and sat on your face backwards. I grinded my asshole on your face for a minute and came very close to coming. But I didn't want to waste any time and I got to work burring you. Now I think I found my favorite type of facesitting," she said gleefully.

"Uh. I only wanted to eat you out. That's what I thought you meant by facesitting." I said in a more confused manner. "Dig me out and let's go home. I'm tired of this and my head hurts now from when you slammed down on me."

She ignored what I said. "That sand on your nose was stuck to your face from the sweat off my ass. I want to do it again. But this time, I want you to be awake. That's why I burried you." Jenny pushed my head back which sank just slightly under the giving sand. She looked around for people. When she felt is was clear enough and nobody was watching, she slipped her shorts off revealing a sight I had longed to see since I met her. She had a beautiful pussy that was puffy and shaved. She stood over me again, as I looked up in awe at her incredible bare ass and pussy, and she lowered her self down onto my face. Her pussy made contact with my nose first and her lips were so soft and warm. My nose slipped between the lips and her butt cheeks made contact with my lips. Suddenly she dropped down on my face full weight. Once again, I couldn't breath and the feeling of helplessness came back to me more familurly. I started to panic, but it didn't matter. She was already sitting on me, and I couldn't move at all.
After about a minute, she rose from my face. She told me to breath. I did. She then reseated herself on me. This continued for another 4 or 5 minutes. She then started getting really wet. Each time she sat down, the juices help her twat slide my nose deep into her guiding pussy lips. After about 15 minutes, she started to slide back and forth on my face. But she wasn't giving me much air any more. I started waiting longer and longer until she'd get up. At one point, I almost thought she might have forgot I was down there. But nothing could have prepared me for what came next.
I watched as her pussy rose up off my face again. The cool air hit my face and felt so good. She pinched my nose downword and wiped my nose off. I guess she was squeezing out some of her juices.

"I want you to be able to feel and smell this. I want this to be your fantasy. Your fetish. When I done here, you will have found your new home... I your best friends ass." She said sadistically.

"Jenny. Please! Quit. Let me take you home." As much as I wanted to have sex with her, and as much as I wanted to do anything sexual, I knew that this was going to hurt me and that I was going to fear Jenny from now on.

She turned around and placed her hands on the sides of my head. Her feet wrapped around me like a two bookshelf butts and kept my head from moving side to side. She then grabbed my hair and pulled my head back hard into the sand so that I was looking straight up. Jenny then decended slowly over my face. I pleeded with her to stop. But with no affect. She just didn't stop.
Her butthole was visible as my nose started to enter it. She giggled a little and continued. Another second later my face was completely engulfed in her beautiful tanned bottom. Her pussy lips rested on my lips and I could feel how puffy they were now. They were softer and more wet then ever. My fast panting breath making them shake and quiver over my lips.
Suddenly and dropped ALL her weight down on me. My face squashed into the sand. I couldn't breath at all. I heard her moan louder then before. Much louder. She wasn't sitting still either. She was grinding down on me so hard that the sand below my head was giving in. She was grinding forward and backward. Back and forth, back and forth. It was so errotic. I was in great pain, but I almost didn't care. Her ass was hypnotising me again. As she ground down on me, my cock started to get irrect, but had no place to go while it was packed into the sand so tight. I was tourcher. I wanted to stick my tongue out and let her ride me with it in her pussy. She got up and let me have air for 2 seconds. I'd almost forgot about breathing.

"Stick your tongue in me," she cried as she sat back down on my face. I complied. "Oh, god... Oh my god... Push it in deeper." She cried and she ground down much harder and the pain jumped much higher. I pressed my tongue in as deep as I could in fear she might crush my face under her if she ground any harder. Her pussy had lubercated almost my whole face and the sweat dripping from between her buttcrack was dripping into my eyes. It burned so much, but I kept my eyes open as much as possible to watch her from between her perfect ass.

"DEEPER!" She yelled again. I didn't know what to do, when suddenly she cried out in a moaning orgasm. She presseded her ass and pussy down on my face so hard that half my head sunk into the sand. It was agonizing. But she slid back and forth on my face throughout the enitre orgasm which seemed to be forever since it had been more than 2 minutes since I last had any air. She started grinding side to side, getting my nose deeper which I thought was impossible from that point. It was already deep!

She then stop grinding on my face, and leaned back for a second that allowed me to catch some air and get in a good breath before she sat upright again and just sat without movement. Accept for her very hard panting, she seemed to be almost motionless as she sat on my face.
About 2 minutes passed. I was really needing air and she'd not moved yet. I was moving my head side to side as much as I could, but her feet still kept my head in place under her planted bottom. But I figured it was enough to tell her I needed air. She didn't move. At all. 3 minutes was starting to roll up when I realized she wasn't getting up at all. I really started to panic. I lay there unable to move and once again had her sitting on my face with most likely the intentions to make me pass out again.
I had to be under her for about 4 mintues when I was blacking out. She got up and air graced my face. I gasped hard. That was the longest I'd ever gone with out air. Light came back to my eyes and she was standing with weak legs above me.

"I almost forgot you were down there," I could tell she was serious.
"Ye-yeah. Let's not... do that again." I panted.
"Well. At least not today. Shall we go back to my place and have sex?" She asked with a beautiful smile on her face.

It was a beautiful Sunday.



Hope you guys liked it. I'm not very good at spelling.

MrCrypt

E.Rotique
01-14-2004, 8:17 PM
That was some story MrCrypt!
It's true, your spelling isn't so good, unfortunately. Have you thought about using a spellchecker in Word before pasting the text into your post?
Anyway, I really enjoyed the story regardless. Thank you very much. For a first attempt, it is sensational!:2guns:

smotherman
01-14-2004, 9:38 PM
Mr Crypt


Incredible 1st attempt,I`d really enjoyed your story.You know what they say about Fantasy!Sometimes it comes true:D


are you still with this girl? if so maybe you can tell her your fantasy!

I`d love the public facesitting encounters,which i can relate to your story.My ultimate fantasy is to be facesitted in public park.I`ve done just about everything else relating to being facesitted but that!

Ms. Kamille
01-14-2004, 11:12 PM
Incredible story, I really enjoyed it. :) Hope you intead to write more! Thanks

Logan
01-15-2004, 12:11 AM
Great story, I could tell that you are passionate about this fantasy. Otherwise the story would not have been nearly as enjoyable.

Logan

herseat_1
01-15-2004, 12:49 AM
Mr. Crypt

Fantastic story. I love the helpless victum overpowered by a
women line. You have the ability of a good writer judgeing by
your first attempt. I really loved your story. Please continue
to write more stories:2guns: :machine: ;)

herseat_1

kxkcbday
01-15-2004, 1:59 AM
Stories are my favorite part of this forum along with Yosi's pics.That was one of the best I have ever read.Thanx for the story!!!!:beer: :theband: :D

FaceHugged
01-15-2004, 4:43 AM
Very nice story. Can't wait for your second one!!!

nosypucker
01-15-2004, 4:13 PM
MrCrypt:

That's a terrific production for a first effort! I'd agree that using a spell-checker would be useful, but I'd also suggest that you find a good editor and work with him on your next couple of tries, after you get the story down on paper. You have the potential to be a good writer, but you're facing the problem of unknown unknowns. That is, you aren't aware of what you don't know about writing, and it can hurt you, even though what you do have is by far the most important component of creating stories. We all look forward to watching you polish and improve.

MrCrypt
01-15-2004, 5:23 PM
Wow. I didn't expect replies like this. Thank you all. I didn't use a spell checker because I wrote that on my laptop (which I haven't loaded word on yet) but the second I finished it I posted it. Thank you for the constructive critism. It's very helpful. Nosepucker, Can you be a little more specific?

By the way, yes I'm still with her, and it's been my long term goal to get her into facesitting, but she finds it really strange. But I haven't given up. She's really into oral, but doesn't like me to eat her out (I'm not sure why yet. I think she's still a bit shy). Anyway, I got her to open up a lot about her butt. Before she didn't like to show it. Now she sees to like me to stare at it. I think that's heading in the right direction. :)

Thank you all again. I'll start writing another one tomorrow if Jenny gives me any good ideas. ;)

MrCrypt.

nosypucker
01-16-2004, 3:14 PM
MrCrypt:

Reading back over what I wrote previously, I wondered if it might have sounded negative. That wasn't my intention, believe me! It was a terrific job for a first effort, and we're all looking forward to what you'll come up with as you progress. I was thinking in terms of being publishable, and that's not the goal here. As for readable and enjoyable and other applicable adjectives, you've already reached that plateau, so pay no attention to that man behind the curtain. Keep writing!

As for the GF's ass, DON'T stop looking at it, admiring it, and even kissing it at every opportunity. Just keep letting her know that you admire her and that that lovely ass is one of the reasons. Once she realizes that your appreciation is genuine and flattering, she'll begin to value your reaction more and more. You'll know yoiu've succeeding when she starts using letting you kiss it as a reward. In fact, the transition of a woman like that from half resenting your attention to her ass to appreciating it and sharing in your fantasies would make a pretty good story!