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Steel Etto
04-14-2003, 10:43 PM
It had taken a eight weeks to write. Four thousand words, the story, and then PC had packed up. So the only way he could get it ready to send of, was by writing it out, by hand. He didn’t know whether she’d appreciate being asked for her comments, and was nervous. But he knew she wrote fiction herself, and her opinion would be invaluable. So it was, into the plastic cover, nice strong envelope, carefully addressed – and into the post box. Handle with care, in big letters……

Mistress Sara was pleasantly surprised, when on a wet Wednesday morning, she checked the mail, and found a large package. She’d not had the best of weeks, her rug had gone missing, and the rain and wind was making it a pain, getting out. Apart from anything else, what with things as they were, she was treading dirt into the house on a regular basis. And then there was a whole bunch of girl friends coming over that evening, too – which would be more mess, and a good week before a tongue would be available to come clean it all up. Life was a bitch, sometimes.

The contents of the envelope turned out a bit disappointing, at first. Some guy, sending a story. A note, asking what she thought, explaining that he was sensitive to criticism, but that he trusted her… Like she cared. Like she didn’t have other stuff to be doing. It wasn’t till later in the day, on the way out to pick up some fresh made cakes, she saw it, where it had been chucked in the corner, and…

It looked a bit untidy, at first, once she’d scattered it all round by the door. It wasn’t the pages in themselves – because as it happened, the writing was pretty neat. It just looked like someone had emptied a trash bin… But, needs must. For one night, it would do. Save the floor, if nothing else.

It was still raining, when she got back. Sara approached the door, pissed off about it all, and having forgotten the provisions she’d made before she left. The heels of her black boots clicked on the step as she tapped her foot, impatient with the world in general, looking for the damn key. Finally.. and then she was in.

It looked a lot better, this time round, the paper all over the place. It had landed quite nicely, all things considered. Spread out enough to be able to move round, but close enough together to be able to tread on the pages without having to leave any wet marks on the floor itself. One piece of paper crumpled and ripped, when she wiped her boots on it – but there was one underneath, so it worked out fine. And it got most of the crap off, so, all in all, it was a pretty good idea. Saved taking the thing straight out to the trash, anyway.

It could stay there, for the day. The girls would understand, it might not look much, but it’d be something to clean their shoes on. Even without wiping, even just walking on the sheets, quite a lot of dirt and shit came off, and most of the wet got absorbed – of course, once it had been trampled by all of them, it’d end up mush, and probably have to be kicked aside, for the cleaner. But, it would do, for now.

Probably enough time, come to that, to pop upstairs and write something decent…..


Each day, he checked the post. He hoped she wouldn’t be too critical. He imagined, being a writer herself, she’d be gentle, with what she had to say. A month went by, and still nothing. The post, probably. Damn. He’d have to write it all out a second time, send it of again. It was too important, not to have her opinion…


(Mistress Sara – hope you’ll forgive me this one. I just couldn’t resist.)

Mistress Sara
04-16-2003, 11:26 AM
Steel etto,

Very nice story, I love the cruelness and the disregard. :D
Poor baby wrote it out by hand and all. Lmao. I was a very good read and thank you, it was fun walking all over your hard work! I can say that your papers went to a good cause. LOL again.

Always Above...

Mistress Sara

PS kenrug gone missing? How do you know I didn't take him to the carpet exchange? hee hee :evillaugh

Steel Etto
04-16-2003, 12:22 PM
Mistress Sara,

Completely made my day. I wasn’t sure which way you’d go with this – I wondered if you might not even have ignored the post, and further humiliated the writer. (Me.) Trouble is, how could I have been sure...

But hell, it was at least as much of a buzz getting a response. And I’m sure you also know that, like so many guys on here, to lie in the mud and the puddles for you to walk over would be such a privilege – but the best I could offer, from this side of the Atlantic, was symbolism. Strong symbolism, though – and I suspect you know how hard it would be, to allow anyone to actually walk near something like that – let alone wipe their feet on it. But you would be very welcome, and I’m so glad you liked the idea.

As for the missing rug… yes, sorry about that. Flights of fancy, lol. Thing was, I couldn’t see how any guy was going to let a manuscript (or any other kind of mat) do a job that their tongue could do instead, assuming your implied permission. Ain’t that just the truth, round your place, I’ll bet?

I’m glad, though, that in reality you have your rug very much in place. All power to him – in a manner of speaking.

S

rugman
04-16-2003, 3:30 PM
Hey Steel Etto,

That was a great story! It was well-written, entertaining and amazingly symbolic. I just love that kind of stuff. I’m truly impressed. I try to include cruel symbolism in my writing, but never have I seen that particular flavor of humiliation and contempt achieved without trample actually occurring! Bravo!

Regards,

Ken

Steel Etto
04-17-2003, 12:38 AM
Kenrug,


Those are very generous comments indeed, and very much appreciated. I'm glad that there are others who enjoy the symbolism, as well as the straightforward act. If I add that I am not entirely surprised that words/imagery play a big part for you (and for Mistress Sara, is my guess) then I am certain you will also know that I like the fact of it being so.

The texts, on Mistress Sara's Homepage, for examples... A1.

I have no doubts whatsoever that if Mistress Sara were in the position to require a covering for a wet floor, then the first thing to hand (which wasn't of value to HER) would be down there, and getting trodden all over, before you could wink. I also suspect that if she thought what she was trampling on was of value to someone (although it would make no damn difference) then she'd feel just that little bit more 'bad' for doing it.

The thing is, with that magnificent woman trashing something I loved, underfoot - I can just imagine myself, afterwards, kissing her boot prints through the tears.

But that's all speculation, from afar. You live it. Many thanks, once again, for doing more than just forgiving the licence taken.


Very best thoughts,

S

rugman
04-17-2003, 5:03 AM
Hi, Steel Etto.

No, I know the risk you took. You risked presumption (which is more brave than I, my friend). But you showed that creative flattery through audacious acts could be rewarded. It’s an act of independent thinking that is all too rare, and all too rarely appreciated by many women, who too often expect us to appreciate them in formulaic ways alone.

It’s fortunate for us both that Ms Sara’s intelligent and experienced enough to see the meaning behind the message. I can’t get away from the fact that I’m the president of the Ms Sara Fan Club. She’s not just pretty (which I adore!), but she also has such a fine and deviously creative mind.

I’d have to say that symbolism is my favorite aspect of trample. It’s what gives it meaning. And that meaning gives the act the mental thrill it holds for me. I just wanted to applaud you for presenting a story that illustrated that concept with such creative zeal and ingenuity.

I’ve been shamefully remiss in not fully reviewing the story section of this board, so may have missed other stories by you. Point me in the right direction buddy. Tell me where I might find more of your evocative writing.

Sincerely appreciating,
(and posting from Xanadu)

Ken

Steel Etto
04-17-2003, 2:16 PM
Ken,


Terrific. It's just such a great feeling when people have very similar 'takes' on certain things, and really good to have a risky tribute not go wrong. As you say, that takes several coins to come up heads at once.

As for the stories, I only ever did one other here, so it is pretty much a blank sheet. But, since I can't chip in with pics, I thought I'd maybe try from another angle - by which I mean I hope to add more, so I'll keep the comments very much in mind.

Take care, and thanks again,

S